What do you think of my poem, Spring Course?

It is the time of birth

the birds in chorus sing

they sit aloft the dogwood trees

and welcome in the spring



flowers not yet smiling

have just begun to grin

tall budding, beautiful branches

nesting the newly born wren



spring time springs upon the land

and sweeps too swiftly by

summertime shows its smiling face

as the weathered air, starts to dry



the short startling showers

were stifled with smiling sun

the youth of spring behind us now

life's course has now begun



fall falling faster

with every breath we take

summertime fades; as green to brown

as the leaves fall to the lake



falling even faster now

as the months march by

wintertime is approaching

the flowers slowly die



as if a lioness encroaching,

winter leaps into the scene

and covers the Earth in heavy silence

as we fall asleep to dream.

What do you think of my poem, Spring Course?
The wording and phrasing is brilliant, but it is irritating at which speed it goes by. It just generalizes too much and brisks away some of the important things. Better to lengthen the poem rather then just ending it so quickly.
Reply:I, for one, love it. The rhyming works and doesn't seem forced, unlike some other poems. It really captures spring and its meaning.
Reply:bravo that all I have to say

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