My first hauki would do you think.?

In the spring

Smelling flowers telephone rings

Go for the day no work all play.







Going out on the beach

sand so nice bare feet

walking in the night

looking at the moon and stars

shined so bright.





Early mornings

mowers going

birds chirping

animals chasing

animals mating

soon many babies.

flying Flowers so bright.

Long days short nights

summer is alright

cannot wait.

My first hauki would do you think.?
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"Going out on the beach

sand so nice bare feet

walking in the night

looking at the moon and stars

shined so bright."
Reply:This is good. I like it.
Reply:I like your poem, well done.



Did you mean Haiku? While this isn't a Haiku, it's a nice poem. I also like the "beach" section.



Thanks for sharing. :)
Reply:I like what you are saying, but feel it needs more.

I don't know hauki, so in that respect it may be fine.
Reply:Thanks Sherry, U have started looking at positive side of life,looking at nature,its a nice start and good try,keep it up,when u start looking at bright side of life,ur life will change and all the happiness will come to u.
Reply:very nice your a poet and don't know it.

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